Cover Letter

Dear Lisa

Paragraph 3 in my original compare/contrast essay talked about how their desire for love is different. But, I didn’t write my main idea clearly and specifically. So, I specified how different their desire by adding the sentence which describes their desire for girlfriends. And I also wrote a transition to emphasize my main idea that they wait for different people as girlfriends in the end of paragraph 3. In addition to that, the conclusion in my original was short. So, I added the interesting point about these songs. That is how both of the singers try to convince the audience that they are earnest about love. I had a problem about conjunctions of verbs in this essay. So, I fixed these errors.

My weakness of writing is “peer response.” Whenever we did peer response in class, I felt very uncomfortable. I always wondered how I could give my comments to my partners. And I think I’m not good at saying my opinion about their writing directly to my partners. So, I think I couldn’t give my comments to my partners properly. It means that I couldn’t help my partners through peer response. So, I felt sorry for my partners. Also, when my partners gave me their comments on my essays, I sometimes felt bad about it. And I couldn’t accept these comments seriously. Another writing weakness is to use transactions to emphasize my ideas. I sometimes got confused about how I could use transactions effectively to emphasize my main ideas.

My strength of writing is to create thesis statements that are specific and effective. I always tried to make my thesis statements clear and interesting. So, I think I did well at making narrow and interesting thesis statements. And I think I did well at editing my writing because I ‘m good at grammar. I tried to be careful about grammar in each essay.

Sincerely

Aiko Takei